Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Natural disasters and emotion

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded The capitalisation of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Excellent – used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development (e.g., unclear what theory/theories may be relevant?) I like the emphasis on stage-based solutions/support. There is a lot of emphasis at the moment on developing disaster resilience within communities. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Overview - Consider adding: focus questions an image Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Well done on creating and uploading your own image! - this can also be listed as a social contribution Caption should include Figure X. ... Cite each figure at least once in the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link Also link to related book chapters Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Good Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:12, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

APA Referencing Suggestion

Hi there,

The referencing template used does not allow for the title of the journal and the volume to be italicized as is required by APA referencing.

(For example). Title of journal: Motivation and emotion, volume 40.

Baumeister, R. F. (2016). Toward a general theory of motivation: Problems, challenges, opportunities, and the big picture. Motivation and emotion, 40(1), 1-10. https://doi.org/10.1007/s11031-015-9521-y

Italicized text: Motivation and emotion, 40

You need to add two apostrophe's (not the quotation marks!) before and after the text to italicize within this template. U3162201 (discuss • contribs) 02:45, 4 October 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a good presentation The presentation is under the maximum time limit, so there was room for further development of the ideas Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is reasonably well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research Perhaps also consider eco-anxiety, eco-grief etc. The presentation includes citations to support claims The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Check and correct grammar (e.g., others -> others') Use APA style for citations (e.g., et al. for sources 3 or more authors) Conclusion A Conclusion slide is minimalistic, presenting a basic take-home message The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question) Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation The narration is well practiced Audio recording quality was very good Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details. A vague copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:28, 13 November 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising, but ultimately basic quality chapter The main is that the chapter is well over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4000 words has been ignored for marking purposes (i.e. from the end of the honeymoon phase section was ignored). Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Interesting case study, but too long. Abbreviate the case study (or split it up throughout the chapter to illustrate different aspects of theory) Explain the problem or phenomenon with more precision Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory – Breadth A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Some use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Research – Key findings Very good review of relevant research Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Research – Critical thinking Good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent/Very good/Reasonably good/Basic summary and conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised Summarise key points Clear take-home message(s) Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. The style is very good, but the grammar is poor. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.[1] Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Figures Figures are well captioned Use this format for figure captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses Check and correct use of commas References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Written expression – Learning features Very good use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Very good use of feature box(es) Very good use of quiz(zes) Excellent use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Include sources in parentheses Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~2 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:40, 18 November 2022 (UTC)