Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Napping, motivation, and emotion

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded but incorrectly formatted The sub-title is correctly worded but incorrectly formatted User page Not created as a user page – see Tutorial 01 Social contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence – looking ahead to the book chapter submission see how to earn marks for social contribution Headings Promising 1-level heading structure which is clear and logical Could benefit from further development by expanding the structure e.g., at sub-heading level Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Good balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure A figure is not presented References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Not developed External links Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:19, 28 September 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Overview Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Clear focus question(s). Use bullet-points. Theory – Breadth Relevant theory is reasonably well explained The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory Build more strongly on other sleep-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Sleep) Theory – Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Key citations are well used Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts Research – Key findings Reasonably good review of relevant research Good detail about key studies Greater overview and synthesis would be ideal (rather than just focusing on one study per point) Research – Critical thinking Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated Conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[2] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Replace double spaces with single spaces Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures are captioned Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Check and correct numbering Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Check and correct how to cite an article with two authors If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References are not in full APA style. For example: Provide full journal titles Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) Good use of case studies or examples No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section No use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:22, 6 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed very briefly. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a basic introduction. Consider creating a more engaging introduction to hook audience interest. Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Focus questions are presented very briefly (too fast to read). They are not narrated. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research Include more citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent/very good/good take-home message(s) A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question) What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic? The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point Basic intonation The audio communication could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Trim the start and end Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:15, 22 November 2022 (UTC)