Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Lottery winners, motivation, and emotion

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Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted
  3. Punctuation for the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Very good - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence
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Headings[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic
  3. Use of questions for headings is effective

Key points[edit source]

  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Check out People's Postcode Lottery
  3. Use British/Australian spelling (e.g., analyze -> analyse; behavior -> behaviour)
  4. Perhaps consider the hedonic treadmill (the idea that people have a baseline level of happiness that they return to, regardless of good and bad events)
  5. Overview - well planned. Consider adding:
    1. an image
    2. an example or case study
  6. Good balance of theory and research, with an applied focus
  7. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  8. Consider including more examples/case studies
  9. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. well developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

  1. A figure is presented
  2. Caption should include Figure X. ...
  3. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text

References[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. doi formatting - hyperlinks should be clickable

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:03, 14 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

Suggestion[edit source]

Hi! This is a really good topic and I thought it was little bit similar to mine! I just wanted to suggest perhaps you could write about the not only the addictive qualities of gambling but also the reward pathway that motivates it! Perhaps you could discuss the neurological pathways associated with the lottery pursuit. (https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s10899-011-9278-5) Good luck! --U3204694 (discusscontribs) 05:54, 1 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

RE: Helpful suggested articles[edit source]

Hi! I just read through your chapter and I thought you might find the following journal articles interesting :) The first follows lottery winners in a longitudinal study and discusses a model of cognitive dissonance in relation to deservedness of winning. Usually people don't feel like they don't deserve the money, but over time they adapt and fully enjoy their winnings. I thought it might be useful under the "positive impacts" emotional section

Oswald, A. J., & Winkelmann, R. (2008). Delay and deservingness after winning the lottery (Working Paper No. 0815). Working Paper. https://www.econstor.eu/handle/10419/76207

Access here: https://www.econstor.eu/bitstream/10419/76207/1/612408701.pdf

The second article discusses the "wealth shock" associated with winning the lottery, and uses a model to explain the long/short term effects on happiness.

Sherman, A., Shavit, T., & Barokas, G. (2020). A Dynamic Model on Happiness and Exogenous Wealth Shock: The Case of Lottery Winners. Journal of Happiness Studies, 21(1), 117–137. https://doi.org/10.1007/s10902-019-00079-w

Access here: https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s10902-019-00079-w


I hope there are helpful! Good luck --u3197931 (discusscontribs) 02:29, 8 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Tables[edit source]

Hey love the chapter content! I was thinking you could add in some tables to consolidate the information for easier digestion for the readers :) --Brianna Meddemmen (discusscontribs) 12:17, 17 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Solid Overview.
  2. Clear focus question(s).
  3. The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title).
  4. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest.

Theory — Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.

Theory — Depth[edit source]

  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts.

Research — Key findings[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is reviewed.
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Research — Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Basic critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. suggesting specific directions for future research
  3. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).

Integration[edit source]

  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Key points are well summarised.
  2. Add practical, take-home message(s).

Written expression — Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking.
    3. "People" is often a better term than "individuals".
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
    3. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
    4. Headings should use default wiki style (e.g., remove additional bold).
    5. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    6. Provide more descriptive headings (e.g., consider using a brief description of the key point for the section titled "*"?).
  3. Grammar
    1. Check and correct use of that vs. who.
  4. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    3. Figures and tables
      1. APA style is used for Figure captions.
      2. Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text.
    4. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses.
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[1]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
      3. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Written expression — Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is good.
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  3. Basic use of image(s).
  4. No use of table(s).
  5. Good use of feature box(es).
  6. No use of quiz(zes).
  7. Good use of case studies or examples.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~8 logged, useful, mostly minor social contributions across two platforms with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:28, 11 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation.
  2. The presentation is under the maximum time limit.

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A context for the topic is established.
  3. The importance of this topic is explained.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
  2. The presentation addresses the topic.
  3. The presentation is well structured.
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory.
  5. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research.
  6. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic take-home message(s).
  2. The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question).

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio.
  3. Audio communication is clear.
  4. Consider slowing down a little and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  5. Audio recording quality was good.

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is very good.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The resolution on some of the slides was low, making the text a little fuzzy.
  5. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  6. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  7. The presentation is well produced using simple tools.

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:12, 18 November 2021 (UTC)Reply