Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Mental toughness

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Minimal, but sufficient Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence. Section headings Sub-headings in the Overview have been moved into a separate section (no sub-headings in Overview or Conclusion) Use default heading style (e.g., remove bold) Under-developed heading structure - develop further. Key points Promising, but under-developed. Overview: I've rewritten the focus question - see what you think. Consider adding a case study. Remove or adapt generic template content. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Lack of sufficient development in Conclusion (the most important section). Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption does not use APA style (check italics). Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text. References 3 provided, but not in APA style. Resources Provided Remove unnecessary full-stops Use bullet-points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:17, 12 September 2020 (UTC)

Social Contributon

I have written a paragraph below that you are welcome to use about developing MT with self-talk.

The study below shows how mental toughness can be fostered in athletes through intentional self-talk. The individual's predetermined certain words that would recall later while performing. This process improved mental toughness (as measured by the mental toughness index) and their overall performance during their run. This makes sense as while being challenged its likely people experience significant self-talk through doubt. The strategy above likely interrupts this process allowing the individual to focus on their momentary performance. Increasing their self-efficacy and ability to persevere through pain.

- Cooper, K. B., Wilson, M. R., & Jones, M. I. (2020). Fast talkers? Investigating the influence of self-talk on mental toughness and finish times in 800-meter runners. Journal of Applied Sport Psychology, 1-19.

Zacharydodemaide

Feedback

Hey! I found an article on mental toughness which may be helpful. It includes a great definition and also includes a section about measuring mental toughness which may be of benefit. It would also be interesting to add in a case study example of mental toughness in sport using a famous athlete as the example! https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/1612197X.2007.9671836?casa_token=DT_APqwiL-IAAAAA:_QDCTIzQZL_h2Exi6ZI6m6kYA-vq3gyPuePOqKFG9xuoGrK_QSOiN0i7ZW7VoGkaN4g_RRlAwY_E-w --Taylor Mamukic (discuss • contribs) 00:46, 11 October 2020 (UTC)

Formatting of references and figures

Hello, your chapter is looking great! Just a few things I picked up on:

1. Be careful of your spacing for your referencing. For example it should be "Adam was the greatest scientist of all time" (Eve, 2013, p. 123). You need a space at the end of the sentence and the start of the brackets, and between the commmas rather than ""Adam was the greatest scientist of all time"(Eve,2013,p. 123)

2. Make sure if you have figures that you refer to them in your chapter (see Figure 1).

However, your chapter is looking good, hope this has been helpful.

--U3190210 (discuss • contribs) 04:45, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter mainly due to lack of research review. The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended. This chapter is well under the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Basic coverage of relevant theory is provided. Discussion of theory could be improved by relating MT to similar concepts such as resilience, grit, perseverance, hardiness, conscientiousness etc. MT is considered almost exclusively in a sporting context. Whilst this context can make for useful case studies/examples, the topic was broader. In what other contexts might MT be useful? Research Several claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills to a professional standard. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format. "People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects". Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Learning features Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. See also and External links - use bullet-points, per Tutorial 1. External links - include source in parentheses after the link, so a reader knows where they are heading if they click No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 1. Basic/No use of image(s). No use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Basic use of case studies or examples. Case studies which show: (a) the development of MT; (b) the consequences of MT would be particularly useful. Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. Check and correct use of that vs. who. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Remove unnecessary capitalisation. Insert missing spaces. Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. So, refer to mental toughness, rather than Mental Toughness. Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of spaces. Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution No logged social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:42, 25 November 2020 (UTC)