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Review
Australian Football: The Political Pat and the Business Future
Author Daniel Josifovski
Word count 2500+
Copyright YesY
Referencing YesY
Structure YesY
Overall rating 4/5/5
Closing comments

Very well researched topic. A lot of informative text about the history of Australian Football. Only downfall is it is lengthly but it seems difficult because there is so much to talk about here. Great topics to consider.

JonathanStone 04:10, 31 October 2011 (UTC)


Review
Australian Football: The Political Past and the Business Future
Author Daniel Josifovski
Word count 2500+
Copyright YesY
Referencing YesY
Structure YesY
Overall rating 4/5
Closing comments Good essay, well written and flows nicely. It provides a good insight into soccer in Australia, including the politics of the sport and struggles it has faced throughout it's development in this country. It also highlights how soccer in Australia now has the right structures in place to ensure a bright future. Brendanduffy 00:12, 19 October 2011 (UTC)


Copy editing[edit]

Hi Daniel, good job so far, sketching out the essay. I did some copy editing up until the section "Business Failures". You'll notice I've inserted quite a number of (REF) calls. You don't have to get them all, but try to get as many as you can. You are telling a very interesting story about the history of soccer in Australia, and the refs would kind ruin the flow, but they're needed for the claims to fact you're making. Given the sensitivity of the subject, you might need to pay extra attention to the references. Keep going. I'm enjoying watching the development. Leighblackall 09:07, 10 October 2011 (UTC)