Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/Flow

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Hello Trinand, feel free to link my page on Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs to your page. I like the layout, but where's your content. Are you writing all out by hand first and then typing the rest up later??? Skachwalla 03:00, 5 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi Trinand, feel free to link to my page on work motivation. I was going to cover the topic of Flow but focused on wellbeing instead. Flow would be a great addition. Thanks! --Flow 22:30, 5 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi Trinand, just letting you know that part of the picture in the intro is covered by the text. If its meant to be like then just ignore this post, but if not just wanted to give you the heads up. Looks great though :-) EamesA 12:33, 6 November 2011 (UTC)

Hey, Maybe make your background a slightly lighter shade,you can barely see the 'see also' links. Also the bold massive headings look really weird, and I am not really sure why they are bold. Also in the flow in eduction section, your last sentence is just 'see' just making sure you remember to stick the link or whatever is meant to be there in. Other than that, good work Mlac 13:30, 6 November 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for all your suggestions! Good luck with your work Trinand 15:51, 6 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi Trinand! I really enjoyed reading your chapter. I notice you have changed the colour scheme, which made your chapter a lot easier to read than last time! Good job SKM1501 07:25, 07 November 2011 (UTC)

(Comment from Moodle) Hi Katrina, Your book chapter looks good, love the colour! And you have obviously done your research as there is a substantial amount of info. If I could make one suggestion, there is a lot of information to take in with your topic and the lavendar boxes that are in both your 'history' and 'characteristics' box make it a little difficult to read. There is a code you can use for the split boxes which might be a more reader-friendly way for people to view the information? Its more asthetics than the information itself I guess.U3035473 21:37, 6 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi - this is an excellent presentation - very good video - well researched - well done - Magnolia

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Overall Overall, this chapter provides a useful overview of flow, but struggles to relate this to happiness. Theory Flow theory is well covered, but there is less material relating this to affect, mood, and happiness. Research Several relevant research studies about flow, such as using the ESM, are described. Perhaps more of these could be used as examples to help inspire a reader e.g., perhaps describe some of the studied cohorts in Bordedom and Anxiety in more detail. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression The chapter is written to a reasonable stand, however there were numerous grammatical and proofreading errors. The chapter could have benefited from a more developed Introduction, with clear focus questions (Introduction). The summary does a very good of gathering take-home self-help messages - more of these could be related to the purpose of the chapter (flow, productivity, and happiness). Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format (e.g., Summary) Getting some earlier comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter. Learning features Video links were useful. More interwiki links could be added The quiz works well Images could be more informatively captioned. Spelling, grammar and proofreading The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the tags Discuss research studies in the past tense. APA style Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. For multiple citations from the same author(s), separate the years with a comma rather than semi-colon

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:12, 28 November 2011 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this was a fun, lively presentation about flow. Structure and content The structure worked well. Perhaps initially focus more on an underlying question or problem or challenge? Fantastic explanation of Csiksentmihalyi's pronunciation! Content was relevant/appropriate. I wasn't sure about use of 'should' in these descriptions - are these characteristics rather than requirements of flow - and symptoms rather than causes? (the conclusion suggests characteristics) Communication Voice was clear and well-paced. Paused (good) between slides. Production quality Fun slides for Introduction (1st min) 10 characteristics slide could have been expanded into more, separate slides. Well scripted. Use of many images appears to have been in violation of copyright and to have been without acknowledgement.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:22, 9 December 2011 (UTC)