Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2026/Cancer screening and emotion

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1. Title Title and subtitle are correctly worded and use sentence casing 2. Headings Basic, 1-level heading structure – could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure (i.e., use subheadings) Insufficient alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings 3. Overview Very good An engaging scenario with a relevant image is planned or presented in a feature box at start of the Overview A promising description of the problem/topic is planned or presented What are the most relevant psychological theories? Use present, rather than future, tense (fixed) Develop closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings 4. Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section The scope is excellent (i.e., not too little/narrow or too big/broad) The writing style is clear and easy to follow Promising balance of theory and research Excellent use of citations Consider using Studiosity Writing Feedback+ or a similar writing-support service (e.g., Grammarly) to improve the quality of written expression and check for grammatical and spelling errors in the book chapter draft. Do these key points include genAI content? If so, this needs to be acknowledged in the edit summaries, otherwise it violates academic integrity. Conclusion is well underway What are the practical, take-home messages? (address the focus questions) 5. Figure Relevant figure(s) are presented and captioned There is no need to provide image acknowlwedgement; clicking on the image shows the meta-data Figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1) Consider decreasing image size(s) to make them less dominant (fixed) 6. Learning feature Add in-text interwiki links for first mention of key terms to Wikipedia and/or book chapters (see Tutorial 2) Consider incorporating additional scenarios, examples, or case studies to illustrate key concepts. These could build on the Overview scenario or introduce new real-world situations in the main body of the chapter to demonstrate how the concepts apply in practice. Consider including quiz question(s) about the take-home messages Also consider using table(s) to summarise key information 7. References Very good What are the most relevant systematic reviews/meta-analyses about this topic? Check and correct APA referencing style: italicisation 8. Resources See also To be developed (see Tutorial 2) Link to the most relevant Wikiversity book chapters and Wikipedia resources about this topic External links To be developed (see Tutorial 2) Link to the most relevant external resources about this topic 9. User page Excellent Not created – see Tutorial 2 10. Social contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence (see Tutorial 2). Looking ahead to the book chapter, see social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:57, 14 September 2026 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hey, I can see you're hard at work on your chapter. I've really enjoyed what I've read so far. You have some very strong points, and it flows really nicely. I just have one thought. You talk a lot about the negative emotions associated with cancer screenings; however, I think it would be interesting to add some of the more positive emotions, such as relief. For an individual experiencing ongoing health issues, potentially going to several appointments and getting tests done but not receiving any answers, the appointment where they finally get answers and their tests validate the symptoms they have been experiencing can be a relief and a validating experience.

Anyway, that’s just my thoughts. I wish you the best of luck on your book chapter.

JessJ117 (discuss • contribs) 10:51, 11 October 2026 (UTC)

Hey Jess, thank you so much for this comment. I found it highly beneficial, as I definitely covered more of the negative side of things. Based on your suggestion, I've added a section on relief and reassurance post-screening. I really appreciate you taking the time to read my chapter and best of luck with yours. I'm sure it's going to be great! U3280825 (discuss • contribs) 19:35, 14 October 2026 (UTC)