Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2025/Role-playing game motivation

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:37, 19 August 2025 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Also check the page history for changes made whilst reviewing the plan. If you don't understand the feedback or would like further information, get in touch to discuss. Marks are available via UCLearn. Marks are based on the latest version before the due date.

1. Title Title and sub-title correctly worded and use sentence casing 2. Headings See earlier comment about heading casing Promising, 1-level heading structure – could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure (i.e., use subheadings) Heading wording could benefit from being more incisive/descriptive Basic alignment between between sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings. Aim to improve. 3. Overview Good A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section; add an image to the scenario to help attract reader interest A basic description of the problem/topic is planned or presented Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but consider closer alignment 4. Key points Insufficient development Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples Select the best theories about this topic Select the best research about this topic Insufficient use of citations Conclusion is underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure Relevant figure(s) are presented and captioned Figure caption(s) provide(s) a reasonably clear description that is connected with the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1) Consider increasing image size(s) (especially if they have text) to make them easier to view 6. Learning feature Add in-text interwiki links for first mention of key terms to Wikipedia and/or book chapters (see Tutorial 2) Consider use of more scenarios/examples/case studies Consider including quiz question(s) about the take-home messages Also consider using tables to summarise key information 7. References Good What are the most relevant systematic reviews/meta-analyses about this topic? All references need in-text citation Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation italicisation) 8. Resources See also Excellent Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Use alphabetical order External links Good Include source in brackets after link Link to the most relevant external resources about this topic 9. User page Basic Very brief description about self – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution Good – two out of three types of contributions made with direct link(s) to evidence. The other type of contribution is making: One out of three types of contributions made with direct link(s) to evidence. The other types of contribution are making: comments on the talk pages of other chapters (past or current)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:37, 19 August 2025 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall This is a basic, sufficient chapter Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Only cite sources that you consult Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Good Reasonably engaging scenario or case study Include a relevant image Scenario uses an appropriate feature box Explains the psychological problem or phenomenon reasonably well The focus questions are good The focus questions could be improved by: being open-ended rather than closed-ended Theory Reasonably good—relevant theories are selected, described, and explained, with some room for improvement Reduce general theoretical background (e.g., description of SDT). Instead, summarise and link to related resources (i.e., other book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles). Increase emphasis on substantive aspects of theory that relate directly to the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Builds reasonably well on Wikipedia articles but not related chapters by embedding interwiki links for key terms Basic depth is provided about key theory(ies) Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists to clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Basic integration between the most relevant theory(ies) and the best research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Insufficient integration with related chapters Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Key points are summarised in a basic way Address the focus questions Clear take-home message(s) Add practical, take-home message(s) Not counted for marking purposes due to being over the maximum word count Style Written expression The quality of written expression is basic Some sentences could be explained more clearly (e.g., see the and tags) Some sentences are overly long. Strive for the simplest expression. Consider splitting longer sentences into two shorter sentences. Shorter words and sentences are more readable. Try conducting a readability analysis such as via https://www.webfx.com/tools/read-able/. This chapter gets a score of . Aim for 50+. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Communicate one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional numbers) Remove abbreviations/citations from headings Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see tags); consider using a grammar checking tool, Studiosity, and/or peer feedback Check and make correct use of commas Abbreviations Once an abbreviation has been established (e.g., RPG), use it consistently afterwards Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use serial commas[1][2] Figures Very well captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., "(see Figure 1)") Adjust some image sizes to make them easier to read (increase size) and/or less dominant (decrease size) Citations use very good APA Style (7th ed.) Do not include author first name or initials References use basic APA style: Check and correct use of italicisation Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Include hyperlinked dois (for 1-click access) Learning features Basic use of learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. Add embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Reasonably good use of figure(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Reasonably good use of scenarios, case studies, or examples No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of the See also section Rename links per Tutorial 02 Use alphabetical order Add more links Basic/use of the External links section Use sentence casing Include sources in parentheses after the link Add more links Link to the top 3-6 external resources about this topic Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, mostly moderate contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:47, 21 October 2025 (UTC)