Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2025/Pain avoidance motivation

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Pain as a motivation beyond the basic principle of avoiding things that will provide immediate pain such as sharp objects or hot things is really interesting! The idea that chronic pain can also lead to avoidant behaviours isn't something I had considered before and I am really interested to read more! Xav Crow (discuss • contribs) 05:53, 14 August 2025 (UTC)

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic Excellent alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and heading structure "Introduction" heading isn't necessary – provide this information in Overview or move into subsequent sections 3. Overview Excellent – Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, and focus questions Figure 1 image size can be decreased A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box with an image at the start of this section A clear description of the problem/topic is provided Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings 4. Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section (except Conclusion) It may be that all planned aspects cannot be reasonably covered within the final word count, so be selective and concentrate on key aspects that address the question in the sub-title Writing is clear, concise, and easy to follow Excellent use of citations Good balance of theory and research For sections with sub-sections, provide key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure One or more relevant figure(s) are presented and captioned The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1) Consider decreasing image size to make it less dominant in relation to the text 6. Learning feature Excellent in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles Also embed links to related Wikiversity book chapters Excellent use of scenarios/examples/case studies Excellent use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Very good At least one relevant systematic review and/or meta-analysis has been identified Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation provide full journal titles include hyperlinked dois page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) 8. Resources See also Basic Also link to related motivation and emotion book chapters External links Excellent Use alphabetical order 9. User page Used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution Good – two out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence. The other type of contribution is making: direct improvements to other chapters (past or current)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:11, 17 August 2025 (UTC)

Suggestions for chapter

Your chapter has lots of strengths so far! It has an interest and relatable real-world scenario with Emma that makes fear-avoidance easy to understand. The psychology, neuroscience, and social influences are broad and easy to understand. The focus questions are also on topic and guide the readers through what they are about to learn.

I would try to keep Emma as a recurring example; ass a one-line takeaway about short-term avoidance increasing long-term disability (or something similar).

The definition of acute vs chronic pain could be defined more clearly, possibly replace strong 'unknown causes' with multifactorial explanation such as risk factors, prevalence, maybe even a comparison table (helps give you credit for a learning feature).

Overall, the structure is great with hooks and examples that can be easily tied together to the main topic of the chapter.

Rellimit (discuss • contribs) 06:55, 25 September 2025 (UTC)

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Overall This is a reasonably good chapter The main area(s) for potential improvement: reduce general/background material; sharpen focus on directly addressing the sub-title: "How does avoidance of physical pain shape motivated action?" more detailed review of the best psychological research about the topic write more in your own words I suspect there may be unacknowledged use of genAI output; if so, it violates academic integrity principles Very good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims In some places, there are too many citations, in other places there are too few citations (e.g., see the tags) Over the maximum word count. Content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Very good Engaging scenario or case study in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon Abbreviate the description of the problem; move detail into subsequent sections Reduce the number of citations (e.g., cite a maximum of 3 sources per point) The focus questions are very good FQ1 - a better question would be what is pain avoidance FQ4 - could be written more clearly/succintly Theory Basic—a very good range of relevant theories to pain are selected, described, and explained, however, the chapter could be strengthened by focusing more directly on pain avoidance and its impact on motivation (rather than describing theory/research about the experience of pain itself) The fear avoidance model is the most relevant theory presented Builds effectively on Wikipedia articles Doesn't build on related chapters (by embedding interwiki links for key terms) Good depth is provided about key theory(ies) Reasonably good use of tables, figures, and/or lists to clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Be more selective, to concentrate on the top sources about PA and M Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research There are a lot of citations, but a lack of indepth critical synthesis of the top research about the topic Greater emphasis on systematic reviews and/or meta-analyses would be ideal The fear avoidance model is the most relevant theory presented. Focus on the research about this model to help determine its usefulness. More detail about key studies would be ideal In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Basic integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Deeper integration of research with the critical analysis of key theories would be ideal Insufficient integration with related chapters Conclusion Reasonably good Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Abbreviate. Reduce general info about pain. Focus on synthesising the best theory and research about pain avoidance and motivation. Key points are well summarised The focus questions are addressed Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression The quality of written expression is very good The main area for improvement is to abbreviate the less relevant aspects Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") instead of 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") in the main text. 1st of 2nd person can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Layout The structure is overly complicated; aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Introduction and Conclusion Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar and spelling are excellent Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g,. Extraversion) – more info APA style Use serial commas[1][2] Use sentence casing for disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Reasonably well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Citations use very good APA Style (7th ed.): List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname (e.g., Giraffe, 2024; Zebra & Aardvark, 2020) References use very good APA style: Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Overall, the learning features are good to very good Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles Add embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of figure(s) No use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Good use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages Insufficient/No use of the "See also" section Also include links to related book chapters Not counted for marking purposes due to being over the maximum word count Social contribution ~2 logged, useful contributions with direct links to evidence ~1 logged contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess. See tutorials for guidance about how to get direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:01, 7 October 2025 (UTC)