Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2025/Homeostasis and basic drives

Topic development feedback

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1. Title Title and sub-title correctly worded and use sentence casing 2. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development and/or refinement Good alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and heading structure, but there is room for improvement (I've made some changes) 3. Overview Excellent – Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, and focus questions A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box with an image at the start of this section A clear description of the problem/topic is planned or presented Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but consider closer alignment 4. Key points Promising development of key points Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples Promising use of citations For sections with sub-sections, provide key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Focus most of the chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure Excellent - Relevant figure(s) presented, captioned, and cited Figure caption(s) could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1) 6. Learning feature Excellent in-text interwiki links for first mention of key terms to Wikipedia and/or book chapters Consider use of more scenarios/examples/case studies Excellent use of quiz question(s) Place quiz each question in the most relevant section Focus the quiz question(s) on the take-home messages Excellent use of table(s) 7. References Excellent What are the most relevant systematic reviews/meta-analyses about this topic? 8. Resources See also Excellent Use alphabetical order External links Excellent 9. User page Excellent Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution One out of three types of contributions made with direct link(s) to evidence. The other types of contribution are making: direct improvements to other chapters (past or current) comments on the talk pages of other chapters (past or current)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:39, 22 August 2025 (UTC)

Reminder comment for marking purposes

@Jtneill

I was unable to comment on the UClearn submission, so posted here.

Hi James, this is a reminder comment that you asked me to post for marking purposes. Please kindly consider my last edited version of my submission. For the ‘Key aspects of homeostatic regulation through theories' section.

Best Regards U3242235 (discuss • contribs) 11:31, 29 September 2025 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall This is a basic chapter The main area(s) for potential improvement: more detailed review of the best psychological research about the topic quality of written expression Basic/ use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Very good Engaging scenario or case study Figure 1 is relevant to the scenario Scenario uses an appropriate feature box Description of problem is too long/overly complicated—explain the psychological problem or phenomenon in a simpler way. Move detail into subsequent sections. The focus questions are excellent (clear and relevant) Theory Builds somewhat on other Wikipedia articles and/or related chapters by embedding interwiki links for key terms Basic depth is provided about key theory(ies) Excellent use of tables, figures, and/or lists to clearly convey key theoretical information In many places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research Greater emphasis on systematic reviews and/or meta-analyses would be ideal More detail about key studies would be ideal In many places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Insufficient integration between the most relevant theory(ies) and the best research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Increase integration with related chapters Conclusion Good Overly long; overly long paragraphs Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised The focus questions are addressed Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression The quality of written expression is basic Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Bullet points are overused. Develop more of the bullet point statements into full sentences and paragraphs. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") instead of 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") in the main text. 1st or 2nd person can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Layout The chapter structure is underdeveloped Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see tags); consider using a grammar checking tool, Studiosity, and/or peer feedback Check and make correct use of commas APA style Use serial commas[1][2] Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used ... as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA Style 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Direct quotes need page numbers Figures Well captioned Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Increase/decrease some image sizes to make them easier to read Tables Very well captioned Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style In some places, better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) References use good APA style: Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Excellent use of learning features Reasonably good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. Add more embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of figure(s) Excellent use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Excellent use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Good use of the See also section Very good use of the External links section Social contribution ~7 logged, useful, mostly moderate to major contributions with direct links to evidence No logged contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:38, 20 October 2025 (UTC)