Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2025/Cultivating awe

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Great job! I really appreciate the quality of each heading, and the research is well done. There’s a small syntax error in your quiz, but once that’s fixed, I’m sure it will be very engaging given such an interesting topic. U3239991 (discuss • contribs) 15:13, 14 August 2025 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Also check the page history for changes made whilst reviewing the plan. If you don't understand the feedback or would like further information, get in touch to discuss. Marks are available via UCLearn. Marks are based on the latest version before the due date.

1. Title The title and/or sub-title were not correctly worded (fixed). We can discuss adjusting the sub-title if you like. 2. Headings Well developed 2-level heading structure Concentrate the structure on cultivating awe. There are already more general chapters about awe (which you've linked to). Excellent alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and heading structure. However, both should be more closely aligned with cultivating awe. 3. Overview Very good – Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, and focus questions Concentrate not so much on awe in general, but rather cultivating awe A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box with an image at the start of this section Focus the description of the problem/topic on how to cultivate awe Align focus questions more closely on cultivating awe 4. Key points Key points are well developed for most sections Very good use of citations Good balance of theory and research Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure One or more relevant figure(s) are presented, captioned, and cited The figure caption(s) could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1) 6. Learning feature Excellent in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to relevant book chapters Placeholder use of scenarios/examples/case studies Placeholder use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Good At least one relevant systematic review and/or meta-analysis has been identified Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation italicisation) make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) 8. Resources See also Good Use sentence casing Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) External links Very good Use sentence casing 9. User page Used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution Good – two out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence First contribution doesn't link to direct comparison

Hello, the chapter does a good job explaining future orientation and its relationship with criminal behaviour, specifically by relating psychological, social and environmental factors. One area that could be improved to make this chapter further stand out is to ensure all claims are supported by appropriate academic sources and making the connection between future orientation and criminal behaviour more clear in some section. Overall a good job it provides a clear and relevant overview of the topic! -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:38, 16 August 2025 (UTC)

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Hi there, amazing progress on your book chapter!

Your chapter on cultivating awe gives a detailed and critical analysis on the psychological, neurological and social factors that influence the experience of awe, as well as a thoughtful discussion of the implications on mental wellbeing and behaviour. The opening scenario captures your topic in a natural, real world setting that draws the audience in by talking about the amazing experiencing of the aurora in Alaska. You have covered a number of foundational psychological theories, such as Keltner and Haidt evolutionary explanations. You have also been able to integrate empirical research on cognitive, emotional, cultural and personality that shows your well rounded understanding. You have highlighted the complexity of awe and presented its presentation across different contexts and people.

To improve this chapter, I have a couple of suggestions to make it even more insightful. The first small change I would make is to edit your transitions between sections to be smoother, maintaining logical progression. Some sections include terms that may benefit from more elaboration, for example how schema liberation works during awe. Additionally, including some more practical applications, such as how practitioners can potentially foster awe in daily life or through interventions.

I have made some edits to your chapter, mainly just changed some sentence structure to make sure your writing is clear, as well as included notes of where you may what to further elaborate. I made some edits to your grammar, just adding in missing full stops, breaking up sentences with commas, removed repeating words and changed some of the writing to a more academic tone (e.g. didn’t to did not).

Overall, your progress on your chapter shows an insightful and multidimensional look at the concept of awe, highlighting its underpinnings and psychological concepts. By adding in these changes to provide a clearer practical takeaway, it would elvate your writing even further. SidneyKShaw (discuss • contribs) 10:45, 21 September 2025 (UTC)

References to consider

@U3255111:

Monroy, M., & Keltner, D. (2023). Awe as a pathway to mental and physical health. Perspectives on Psychological Science, 18(2), 309–320. https://doi.org/10.1177/17456916221094856

Yaden, D. B., Iwry, J., Slack, K. J., Eichstaedt, J. C., Zhao, Y., Vaillant, G. E., & Newberg, A. B. (2016). The overview effect: Awe and self-transcendent experience in space flight. Psychology of Consciousness: Theory, Research, and Practice, 3(1), 1–11. https://doi.org/10.1037/cns0000086

Yaden, D. B., Kaufman, S. B., Hyde, E., Chirico, A., Gaggioli, A., Zhang, J. W., & Keltner, D. (2019). The development of the Awe Experience Scale (AWE-S): A multifactorial measure for a complex emotion. The Journal of Positive Psychology, 14(4), 474–488. https://doi.org/10.1080/17439760.2018.1484940

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:34, 22 September 2025 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:11, 7 October 2025 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall This is a reasonably good chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem The main area(s) for potential improvement: quality of written expression Basic use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims In many places, better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Over the maximum word count. Content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Very good Engaging scenario or case study in a feature box with a relevant image Explains the psychological problem or phenomenon reasonably well Clarity of written expression can be improved The focus questions are very good The focus questions could be improved by: being more specific Theory Very good—key theories are well explained and applied; minor areas for improvements Builds effectively on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Very good depth is provided about key theory(ies) Excellent use of tables, figures, and/or lists to clearly convey key theoretical information In many places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Reasonably good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research Greater emphasis on systematic reviews and/or meta-analyses would be ideal More detail about key studies would be ideal Reasonably good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Very good integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Key points are well summarised The focus questions are addressed Clear take-home message(s) Style Written expression The quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills. Use active (e.g., "this chapter explores" or "this chapter has explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter will explore" or "this chapter has explored") [1][2] Layout The structure is overly complicated; aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Introduction and Conclusion Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings See earlier comment about heading casing Move links from headings into their first mention in text Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see tags); consider using a grammar checking tool, Studiosity, and/or peer feedback Check and make correct use of commas Possessive apostrophes are not used correctly (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') Check and correct use of that vs. who Abbreviations Only use abbreviations such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc. inside parentheses, otherwise spell them out Spell out abbreviations on their first use, to explain them to the reader (e.g., DMN) Only introduce abbreviations which are subsequently use Spelling Many words are misspelt (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use serial commas[3][4] Use sentence casing for disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used ... as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA Style 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Briefly captioned; provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style < Tables Use APA style for captions (see example) Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations use basic APA Style (7th ed.): List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname (e.g., Giraffe, 2024; Zebra & Aardvark, 2020) Move embedded links to non-peer reviewed sources into the External links section; only cite peer-reviewed sources References basic APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[5] Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Overall, the learning features are very good Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles Add more embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good/ use of figure(s) Reasonably good use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Very good use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of the "See also" section Rename links per Tutorial 02 Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses after the link Add more links External links not counted for marking purposes due to being over the maximum word count Social contribution ~5 logged, useful, mostly moderate contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:11, 7 October 2025 (UTC)