Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Polyamory and emotional need fulfillment

Compersion

Check out compersion. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:45, 23 September 2016 (UTC)

Interesting! Thank you for that information--U3096943 (discuss • contribs) 11:12, 27 September 2016 (UTC)

Comments

Hey Dana,

Was just having a quick read over your chapter - very informative and interesting, well done! Just noticed one thing with your referencing - You need to indent the second line of your references, so that they are "hanging". In the template that you would have originally used to get your chapter structure, their will be a little "box" in the reference section (you'll have to hover over it to see it) which already had the built in syntax so that your references are indented on the second line, so you can just add to that at they will "hang" automatically. Hannah :) --U3100481 (discuss • contribs) 00:45, 13 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:53, 29 September 2016 (UTC)

Thanks James. --U3096943 (discuss • contribs) 02:19, 2 October 2016 (UTC)

Comments

Hi, Interesting topic and your page looks great so far! I have shared a couple of contemporary articles that are hopefully helpful and may provide a slightly different perspective. The first article focuses on outsiders attitudes toward polygamy and a new assessment measure for assessing attitudes. The second focuses on sexual motivation and specifically female sexual motivation to engage in same-sex behaviors. Best of luck with the rest of your chapter, can't wait to see the finished product :) http://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/19419899.2014.1001774 http://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s10508-014-0462-4--U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 18:12, 14 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi Dana. I think your chapter is really great! I really enjoyed the overview, which easily drew me in! I found each section logical and flowed on well to the next. I thought all your graphs and tables worked well and broke up the text. I thought the way you applied theories and model to the topic was good and you showed good critical thinking.(Something I could have improved on). I liked your images, especially at the end. I think you have done a really great job, especially in term of creating a space to reconsider preconceived ideas about polyamory. Pushed to suggest anything, maybe an image with some colour at the beginning. I was also wondering about interactive feature, (mainly because I didn't include one. and now I am kicking myself big time). The only other tiny thing is, in the overview I got tripped up a with the word "values" in the sentence starting... I had to read it a few times to see if you meant monogamous values or polyamory origins values.

Great job, I learnt a lot! Good luck Lorinda"

Structure

I suggest avoiding having only a single sub-section within a section; either add another sub-section or merge the content into the higher level section. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:50, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Overview Too brief Add an Overview slide Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation. Selection and organisation The multimedia topic of "Reducing Stigma Towards Polyamorous Relationships" appears to differ from the original book chapter topic of "How can polyamory contribute to emotional need fulfillment?". Otherwise, well structured. Theory rich; research poor. Addresses the life improvement theme. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples. Include citations and references e.g., support for claim that polyamorous people develop a rich set of values? Conclusion Take-home messages / key points are well summarised, but the points are not related to the original question. Communication Audio Well narrated. Audio is clear and well-paced. Perhaps leave some longer pauses between sentences. Visuals Basic - approximately half a dozen mostly text-based slides with some images. Remove cursor. Production quality Overall, basic production. Meta-data Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). Add a link to the book chapter. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript). Audio recording quality Very good Image/video recording quality Effective use of simple tools. Licensing The stated license in the description doesn't match the selected youtube license. The copyright licenses and sources of the images used are not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:43, 23 November 2016 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a fantastic chapter which incorporates a balanced, critical review of relevant theory and research and makes effective use of the wiki environment. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements. Theory The Overview is clear and well-written. Research is very well considered, in a balanced, critical manner. The Conclusion is clear and well-written. Research Research is very well considered and incorporated critically and in relation to theory. Written expression Written expression Very well written; makes good use of the wiki environment. For academic writing in psychology, such as this book chapter, write in third person rather than first (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our") or second (e.g., "you", "your" etc.) person perspective. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. The chapter addresses the topic and book theme, and provides practical take-home messages. Use an active rather than a passive voice. Structure and headings Well structured and organised. Each section should start with at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections. Layout Excellent of the wiki environment. Integration with other chapters evident. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to relevant Wikipedia articles. Images and tables are effectively used. Spelling Generally very good - some minor possible improvements - see the tags. Grammar and proofreading Generally very good - some minor possible improvements - see the ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). APA style Generally very good. Use APA style for table and figure captions. The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for paginated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:55, 23 November 2016 (UTC)