User talk:WillSackett/The Role of Sport for Government
| Presentation: The Role of Sport for Government | |
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| Author | Will Sackett |
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| Referencing | Could of put reference list at the end of presentation. |
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| Overall rating | 3.5/5 |
| Closing comments | As a coach of junior sport, I find it frustrating how much money is thrown at elite sports, and we have to constantly fundraise to get our kids on the park, so overall an interesting arguement. I am sure if you had more time or more knowledge how to insert graphs and photos you would of done so to help support your case within the presentation, but you gave the viewer the option to go to your blog and essay. Well done Good effort :) --CHugginson 04:12, 29 October 2011 (UTC) |
| The Role of Sport for Government | |
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| Author | Will Sackett |
| Word count | 798 |
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| Overall rating | 3/5 |
| Closing comments | I gather you are still in progress with this essay , but what you have so far is great mate. Its interesting knowing that there is little funding towards sport at grassroots level. Just a few things that may need to be considered is labeling the image, get into detail with your references you have listed at the bottom of the last section and try and find the abstracts of the journals you may be using or a direct link rather than a link to the university database because someone who isn't from the university may not be able to access them. I am looking forward to the final submission.--Daniel.josifovski 10:00, 24 October 2011 (UTC) |
Hi Will, this is a good selection of topics. I edited your outline simply to suggest a slightly different structure. I moved your second paragraph to be the last, just to close off the outline, and focus on the 2 topics you are using: Crawford and FIFA. Through these is should be possible to cover business and politics from a local to international scale, but you might need to constantly remind yourself, and resist the temptation to focus only on the national scale. Leighblackall 23:11, 12 September 2011 (UTC)
Will I like the topic too. Remember to consider the Government's response to Crawford (Pathways). I am keen to discuss this. Postillion 23:41, 13 September 2011 (UTC)
Thanks Leigh, it looks better now that things have been switched around a bit, will keep that in mind. Thanks Keith, I will have to have a look at the response from the government. I am not sure whether I should focus solely on Crawford or include the World Cup bid as well? WillSackett 22:14, 20 September 2011 (UTC)
Will, I like the way this is developing. I would stick with Crawford and the Government's response. If you need more information try http://keithlyons.me/?s=Crawford+Report&submit=Search Postillion 05:55, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
Will, I have worked through your essay as if it was in Word. I have made some edit suggestions. I look forward to discussing this with you. Postillion 10:48, 1 November 2011 (UTC)
