Review
| Football Economic: A comparative analysis of player wages and salaries between the elite football leagues |
| Author |
Jono Tiny Stone |
| Word count |
2438 |
| Copyright |
 Y |
| Referencing |
Y |
| Structure |
All looks good Jono |
| Overall rating |
4.5/5 |
| Closing comments |
Looks good. Paints a good picture of the considerable financial aspect of elite football. Nice tiny. RB2011 01:43, 31 October 2011 (UTC) |
Review
| A competitive analysis of player wages and salaries between the elite football leagues |
| Author |
Jono Stone |
| Word count |
2457 |
| Copyright |
Y |
| Referencing |
Y |
| Structure |
The page looks very good, and is laid out very well. |
| Overall rating |
4/5 |
| Closing comments |
Just check your punctuation in the conclusion, and include a heading for your introduction, and your referencing needs a little bit of work, but over all very well done Jono :-) EdwinaElizabeth 00:05, 19 October 2011 (UTC) |
Review
| A comparative analysis of player wages and salaries between the elite football leagues |
| Author |
Jonathan Stone |
| Word count |
2,468 |
| Copyright |
 N |
| Referencing |
N |
| Structure |
Y |
| Overall rating |
3.5/5 |
| Closing comments |
Solid comparison of both International Soccer leagues and our A League. Perhaps subsection 3.1 could have remained within section 3. Frick is inconsistent, make all other references like Frick. A-League minimum annual salaries.jpg needs copyright license.Magint 00:18, 19 October 2011 (UTC) |
Hi Jonathan, sorry to take so long in placing a comment and suggestions here on your talk page. You should blend the outline, into the introduction now. The outline was your pitch to the journal, now they have accepted your proposed essay, you don't need an outline, the introduction can take most of what you say there. Also, try to relate the issue of player salaries, to local club policies and practices. The inclusion of the table is very interesting and good start. Reading through your outline/intro, I also felt myself asking what these massive salaries are actually spent on. Is it true that it all goes to the player only? Or is it distributed through the player's agents, coaches, therapists, charities etc? Good to watch you develop this essay. Leighblackall 21:45, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
