I think you have made a good start, Edwina! Delighted you have inserted the image.
It will be interesting to read how you view therelationship between commercialisation and the play spirit.
I wondered with your interest in athletics if you had considered professional races in an age of amateurism and the persistence of Gifts in Australia culture. What sustains this particular form?
Postillion 11:26, 13 September 2011 (UTC)
Reviews [edit]
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| Commercialisation of Sport |
| Author |
Edwina Gadsby |
| Word count |
1677 |
| Copyright |
 Y |
| Referencing |
Y |
| Structure |
Y |
| Overall rating |
4/5 |
| Closing comments |
Well written essay and an interesting topic. It was easy to read with the headings that you provided. I would suggest changing the spelling of even in the local level. Overall a great effort.--Rhiannon Stephens 02:55, 24 October 2011 (UTC) |
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| Commercialisation of Sport |
| Author |
Edwina Gadsby |
| Word count |
1677 |
| Copyright |
Y |
| Referencing |
Y |
| Structure |
Y |
| Overall rating |
4.8/5 |
| Closing comments |
Very well written and great overall formatting! The word count may be slightly low, although doesn't really matter because of the quality of the work. I really liked the headings, really attention grabbing. In answer of your question- I believe commercialisation of sport is beneficial as it indirectly improves the quality of sport Gus Gardiner 00:08, 26 October 2011 (UTC) |
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| Commercialisation of Sport |
| Author |
Edwina Gadsby |
| Word count |
1677 |
| Copyright |
Y |
| Referencing |
Y |
| Structure |
Y |
| Overall rating |
4/5 |
| Closing comments |
Eddy, your essay flows very well, clear outline of local, national and international affects/issues on commercialisation of sport. Bit low on the word count though, perhaps adding a paragraph about polticis and commerciatliation with specific issues might help. Overall great job. Great unique headings, more appealing and eyecatching. U3017206 23:17, 26 October 2011 (UTC) |
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| Commercialisation of Sport |
| Author |
Edwina Gadsby |
| Word count |
1677 |
| Copyright |
Y |
| Referencing |
Y |
| Structure |
Y |
| Overall rating |
5/5 |
| Closing comments |
what a great essay well written and gives a clear understanding of the topic. |
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| Commercialisation of Sport |
| Author |
EdwinaElizabeth |
| Word count |
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| Copyright |
Y |
| Referencing |
Y |
| Structure |
Y |
| Overall rating |
4/5/5 |
| Closing comments |
Eddy, once again you've done a great job. You have meshed your essay and presentation really well, outlining the main issues concerning the commercialisation of sport thanks to globalisation. Good job on the presi presentation and the wordle application is also really effective to get a instant understanding of what your topic covers. Good job! U3017206 12:08, 1 November 2011 (UTC) |
Review
| Commercialisation of Sport |
| Author |
EdwinaElizabeth |
| Word count |
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| Copyright |
Y |
| Referencing |
Y |
| Structure |
Y |
| Overall rating |
4/5/5 |
| Closing comments |
Really nice presentation, your Prezi presentation provides a great visual interest. The audio and images combine well together to provide a sound understanding of the topic. I also like the Wordle - lots of things to keep our attention! --Amy.e.cotton 13:05, 2 November 2011 (UTC) |
