Talk:Motivation and emotion/Textbook/Emotion/Adolescence

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Chapter feedback

This textbook chapter has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via login to the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see what editing changes I have made whilst reading through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below or continuing to improve the chapter if you wish. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall this is a Pass-level chapter. The chapter provides evidence of a basic understanding of emotion in general and for adolescents in particular. The treatment of theory and research was sufficient, but not in-depth. Minimal usage was made of the wiki format (feature boxes and reflection questions were included) but uploaded images had to be deleted due to not being free to use.

Theory[edit]

  1. The understanding of emotion in adolescence was sufficient, but basic.
  2. The definition of emotion was pretty vague and weak; it did not really reflect understandings of emotion discussed in Reeve (2009) or lectures and tutorials.
  3. The text describes primary and secondary emotions, but the table has primary, secondary and tertiary emotions.
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Research[edit]

  1. Sufficient but limited use of peer-reviewed research on emotion in adolescence was evident.
  2. Many aspects of emotion in adolescence are not considered e.g., does mood fluctuate more in adolescence? Are there gender differences in adolescent emotion? How do adolescents cope with their emotions? What are the predictors of emotional adaptation? What about depression and anxiety (these are the big two emotions).
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Written expression[edit]

  1. The textbook chapter was presented in a straightforward manner, with a clearly structure and was reasonably well written.
  2. There could be some potential problem of authenticity of academic work here because the chapter has been only edited by Haddo which is not the user account of the person who signed up for the chapter (Stephmartin. Make sure to edit under your own account.
  3. The Introduction does not clearly explain what will be covered in the chapter.
  4. The chapter could have benefited from a more developed introduction, with clear focus questions. Getting comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped particular with this aspect.
  5. There was a copyright licensing problem with File:Parrot emotion.jpg (it has now been deleted) and also with the Phoebe Prince image. The emotion table appeared to be a partial screenshot of copyrighted material from another website without acknowledgement or permission. The Phoebe Prince photograph also did not acknowledge the source or copyright owner. Please note that this is borderline plagiarism.
  6. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Adolescents that -> Adolescents who
  7. APA style
    1. The source of this quote "Find a guy who calls you beautiful..." wasn't acknowledged
    2. A numbered of cited references were not in the reference list.
    3. Beyond Blue (year not cited) - Good to use this or a practical exercise but its better to use peer-reviewed citations to support claims
    4. References - check formatting and capitalisation


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via login to the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.

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Overall[edit]

  1. This presentation provides a basic, narrated bullet-point summary of the chapter.
  2. Explain why this topic is important.
  3. Perhaps present some key questions to be answered.
  4. Slow down the narration voice. Pause between sentences to allow the viewer to interpt tand thinkin about the satetmetn.
  5. Increase font size.
  6. Increase variation in voice tone would help the reader to pay attention.
  7. Summary?
  8. References?
  9. Image attributions?
  10. Copyright license?

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Communication[edit]

Production quality[edit]

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 14:56, 14 December 2010 (UTC)O